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PostSubject: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 4:32 am

Icarus Flight

The stars have all gone,
the sea has washed away and I feel
like the right way is wrong.
The sun is next to me,
everyday at the drained sea.
And everyday a dove loses it's feathers
and the clouds are all aligned to me.

Soaring, blazing through the winds
never ending flight with the wings of Icarus.
Watching the land turn into rubble like sins.
Love means nothing to me,
i find myself drifted out into a desolate sea.

The angels feel each other,
Like space caressing the earth.
Mankind can not which for another.
Even if the stars are all here
What would we do...

The moon, scarred in the element of darkness
consumes the gleam of light and all it's
majesty. Marvel at it's brightness
for it may be the last time to view it...


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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 7:24 am

I don't think this goes here in the Artist's showroom. Its for drawings and such, not writing. I believe it goes into the Fanfiction forum. Even though its not fanmade or a fiction story, its still writing.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:00 pm

I think it DOES belong in the Artist's Showroom, actually. Some forms of poetry can be considered art, and I think this poem applies to that too. This poem appears to have nothing to do with Sonic or fan "fiction" and fiction is NOT the only form of writing and thus shouldn't be here, I think.

I suppose it's not up to me, but poetry CAN be art and I think we should either expand the Artist's Showroom to written (art) forms too, or create a sub-board for it...

Anyway, beautiful poem there, love it. <3
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:42 pm

Other possible choices could just be General Discussion an The Random Hotel.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 7:59 pm

And suppose if someone else wants to write poetry or other forms of writing too?
I for one occasionally like writing poems. I don't really post them anywhere but I like to write them and I might post them in the future.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sat Sep 12, 2009 9:01 pm

Well since it apparently matters soooooooooooooooooo much what forum it's in, i made a new poetry forum.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 1:31 am

Cool. I liked it. It's really good.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 7:02 am

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I think it DOES belong in the Artist's Showroom, actually. Some forms of poetry can be considered art, and I think this poem applies to that too. This poem appears to have nothing to do with Sonic or fan "fiction" and fiction is NOT the only form of writing and thus shouldn't be here, I think.

I suppose it's not up to me, but poetry CAN be art and I think we should either expand the Artist's Showroom to written (art) forms too, or create a sub-board for it...

Anyway, beautiful poem there, love it. <3
I didn't say fiction was the only form of writing. I said even though its not fanmade or fiction, Its still a form of writing. I moved it into the Fanfiction forum.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 10:59 pm

Not half-bad.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 11:07 pm

Sceinic wrote:
Not half-bad.
Not half bad? It IS bad XDD
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 11:09 pm

Acually, you have potential. Keep workin on it, (with rhymes) and it'll be great. (But it won't pwn like mine.)
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 11:10 pm

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Acually, you have potential. Keep workin on it, (with rhymes) and it'll be great. (But it won't pwn like mine.)
Meh. Not much of a poet. XD. I has no potential. I only started in May 2009 XD.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 13, 2009 11:58 pm

I really liked your poem, Charmy!

You are a great poet! ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:15 pm

Meh. Another crappy poem, but this one is from meh origins XDDD.

I'm lost in a romantic phase
All these people leave without a trace
On the test of hate i answer all the above.
For i don't know anything about love.

My body is enough to carry me
through the ancient sea.
My pride is something i lost
on a Road that i have crossed.
Apathetic i feel at the end of
everything cause i don't know anything about love.

Love stands an obstacle in my life
If love was a person i would stab it with a knife.
And everything else just fades away.
As love still stands always in my way.
Compelling over my emotions out of
my everyday instincts i don't know anything about love.

Everyone else is complaining and need a special person.
But i haven't had that type of lust and seems to worsen
I want to have such a wish a type of feeling of
but i don't know anything about love...
Nothing about love.....
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:16 pm

..... It needs to be fun and friendly...
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:17 pm

Sceinic wrote:
..... It needs to be fun and friendly...
failure.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 20, 2009 9:27 pm

Sceinic wrote:
..... It needs to be fun and friendly...

It doesn't need to be. You should see the kind of poems I have to write essays on for my homework (in a nutshell: lady is cheating on her husband to be with another guy and she 'worships' this other guy and he wants her to keep 'worshipping' him so he strangles her and hugs her dead body all night and thinks he's done nothing wrong. I kid you not). xD


Very nice poem, again. I like the repetition of the last few words on each line on every verse, it's pretty effective.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Sun Sep 20, 2009 10:27 pm

I know it;s good, but it would seriously be better that way.
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Tue Sep 22, 2009 7:41 am

Sceinic wrote:
I know it;s good, but it would seriously be better that way.
Well, that's your taste in writing. Others like his style of writing. Then there are people who like both. It depends on what people prefer or like most.
And of course, it's a nice poem. =D
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Wed Sep 23, 2009 10:35 am

Censored version~

Man without a Job

I want to be free,
and fly so freely,
but something i somehow see
seems to realize me.

I once heard something
Something about this little thing.
" All our lives we sweat and save,
Building for a shallow grave. "

It means towards all the work,
after all the times without a smirk,
your just digging yourself a grave,
a grave you cannot save.

Who is really God?
For i rather just walk over an esplanade.
Funny really for i don't care about lord.
h***, i rather get bored.

I do almost everyday.
Same old place i say.
Nothing to do, nothing to care
Not even something about a retarded dare.

Sad really, I'm wasting my life
Water at hand, a rotten old knife.
Nothing to do. Wait i uh, repeated that
Heh, i can't think right because of my cat.

I forgot where were we,
I believe it was my eyes to see.
See something that is free.
Let it be;

A man will work without pay
But would rather moan and cry everyday.
" Not enough money, not enough chances,
Don't ask for any advances. "

I don't get paid to do this
For i love to write and exists.
I barely get paid at all
i don't work in the fall.

I spoke with my father today
" Don't **** up your life cause you won't get enough pay.
I ****ed up in high-school and wanted to be the class-joker
Now im ****en' working 2 jobs " And yes he's a smoker.

I love him though,
More than my eyes marveling at the snow.
But a perfect example for this piece,
Try to understand it at least.

A man without work and pay
Is repeating the same by day and day.
" All our lives we sweat and save,
Building for a shallow grave. "
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Mon Oct 12, 2009 8:58 pm

Meh. Double post. Sue me.

Blood in Tears

Still due for a second chance
Have a date with a bloody romance.
Take that soul and make it stronger
Hunt for more, lust of hunger.

Tears inside a possessed fool
Nourishment surrounded by a gaping pool.
Midnight suffers in its glory.
Blood in tears makes it gory.

Bless me with sacrilegious water
Tearing inside a shoddy slaughter
Satan never speak out against blood
His tears make a bloody flood.

Murdered before requisitioning more
Another life taken always sore.
A sword planted rigid in the skies
One last time, escape the lies.
****
Before I Go
Let me hang low.
Life has no means
No means to fiends.

Blessed with the power
Of unholy sorrow
This Tree, this hope
Hard to see with myopia

Kiss on the heart
Tears of demons start.
Black night, Red moon
A gore-filled lagoon.

Crown me king of
No meaning of love
Last time we meet
We will greet.

Still due, a second chance.
The soul of romance
Falling no prayers
Blood in the tears
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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jan 14, 2010 11:22 am

All these rule-breaking post. I'm sorry.

Transcendent and Aghast

Rigid father, grant me final wish.
A fallen wraith wishes for more.
Grunting mourning the death of it's mother.
A sinned pleasure of idiotic pleasure.

My angel give me your deliverance of new kind.
Oh, Dreadful brother frightens me unto death.
My soul weeps for answers and cries out violently.
Give me the power of invigoration light!

Plunder into insanity and scorch the yards beyond.
These people have not nothing to contribute.
Teach them how to comprehend and understand.
With blood violence and destruction!

Ah, I feel the loneliness deepening within.
Unleash my master's rage and more!.
Transcendent into a new type of realm and world of languages.
Aghast at the mercy of sinners and all breeds

We hold our hands together
We hope for an angry fix.
We live together as one
And one we all die together!

What type of atrocities are wallowing in despair.
Their all my demons and criers of human people.
We lift up into the sky haven and hope infinity.
Volant into the heavens and rebirth!

Oh my dearly loved angel please come to me.
I want to see the lies of all these breeds and kinds.
Transcendent liberation aghast at the raging fire.
These people have not nothing to contribute.
Teach them how to comprehend and understand.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jan 14, 2010 1:11 pm

Your the creator.. and this is an art topic so yeah.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Thu Jan 14, 2010 9:52 pm

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Your the creator.. and this is an art topic so yeah.
I think what Julie is trying to say is that this is an art/Poerty topic, So double posting is fine.

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PostSubject: Re: Poetry   Fri Jan 15, 2010 10:49 am

Joe Cool wrote:
Zatic The Fire God wrote:
Your the creator.. and this is an art topic so yeah.
I think what Julie is trying to say is that this is an art/Poerty topic, So double posting is fine.

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